I don't drink coffee so when I am in the cafe for my poet residency I sip on herbal teas, one of which is called tea party. I just wrote this today so as per usual, this is a first draft. Please offer any commentary you might have.
Tea party
A party of tea
Tea discoing down my throat a do I
look hot
Shimmy
giggling with the remnants
Of tequila days past
Tea streamers
tickling nostrils
Lingering come and get me and
with a flick
Of
hair
Tea booty
shakes in a flourish of teapot
And cup
Action
Even the saucer gets a lick
Warm and giddy tea drums my mind – faster faster
Then
Slow – lights up after sex
cigarette plumes float in my belly
tea
drunk I am spent but
tea tea parties on
It's a fun poem about tea haha, I like it!
ReplyDeleteUnless I'm mistaken, you might want to fix the line with "Tea discoing..." in it, besides that :)
awesome poem.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the feedback Janet and b3tterthisway28! I had fun writing this. I'll have to play with it a bit more! What didn't you like about discoing b3tterthisway28?
ReplyDeleteLove the rhythm in this one, Rhiannon - it's fantastic, the speed of it is great - and the saucer getting a lick is an image of commitment from the drinker!
ReplyDeleteI don't drink coffee either, but nor do I drink tea, so it'd be a juice-party for me I think.
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Ashley Capes - blogger seems to want to call me anon!
Rhiannon, I've never thought of herbal tea in a sexual way...but you've changed all that...! :) Thank you, I enjoy the rhythm of this piece.
ReplyDeleteThanks Ashley! I'll have to keep playing with this poem, see what I can turn it into :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks Moira! and congrats again for your poem in the poetry of place competition. It was great to hear you read that on Sunday! Hope to see you at the xmas party on the 4th of December at Gleniffer Brae, maybe you can read another poem?!
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